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Imagine a musty darkened world, rotting leaves spread every which way. Knee deep, I wade through the decay, mind clogged, heart weary, soul heavy. All I want is a taste of fresh air. Every breath brings in the stink of death, and I’m tired of it. I’ve grown lethargic, and this landscape is only the reflection of my mind.

You’re voice rings in my head, and all I can hear is your soft tones. All I want is you. Looking down at my feet, I see a glisten through the decay, and at that moment I know. Break through the lethargy and I’ll find your beautiful face. Long forgotten energy starts to flow through my veins, and I see possibility once again.

I raise my hand, fingers clenched into a fist, and up from above comes a comforting shadow. Above me is a giant fist, a mirror image, an immense doppelganger. For the first time in a long time, a smile crawls up my face.

Fist to floor, fingers extend, and the doppelganger follows. Flesh touches leaves, and then they fly.  Reaching for the goal I drag and rake, fervently rushing toward your image, and the harder I work the more tired I get, and the wider my smile.

Leaves clear, the decay fades, and I see your forest green eyes and I know that I am free.
©2009 ~EmpathyFlux
:iconempathyflux:

Author's Comments

5:38 am and I just spun this out. The credit goes entirely to :iconpsychedelic-joi: Psychedelic-joi :)

Her amazing poem "letters on a splatted page" dredged through the crevices of my chaotic mind and energized the endergonic reaction to create order out of disorder. And out came "Lethargic Leaves".

I hope you all like it, please critique!

With love,

Sahil

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:iconehb:
Wow, Sahil, do you know how beautiful this is?
:iconempathyflux:
Thanks for the favorite, I'm glad you liked it. The scene just jumped into my head after reading :iconpsychedelic-joi:'s piece.
:iconehb:
Thats because you are a writer ;)
:iconpsychedelic-joi:
wow I inspired this???! :shocked:
this is fantastic, Sahil!!! u can really tell this is from your soul and i think it's very good!! i am so flattered that you like my writing so much. :awestruck: GREAT work and thank you again!

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I'm an eater with a running disorder. :crazy:

Only 4% of teens proclaim Jesus Christ as their savior, if you're one of them, put this in your sign.
:iconempathyflux:
Yup this was all you :) I read your entry and this whole thing just erupted in my mind, I had to write it down.

Keep inspiring! <3
:iconmarkthalemue:
It's very deep, I like it...:thumbsup:

--
Born of destruction
Bred in agony
Is this my salvation?
From these ashes,
I'm your devastation...

Iced Earth - "The Reckoning (Don't Tread on Me)"

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